Ye, that was somehow
what i meant, although we would need to find the perfect "line" for it.
I would also push his "chin" and "mouth area" a bit back, as it seems that is jaw is a bit big.
Another picture with his mouth/chin area.
Then there's the nose/eyes area that i can't really put my finger on to say whats wrong with it. I know that human models are hard to make because of their head/faces; takes a lot of work to gain some experience in that part since they are much more detailed than making a body.
From APZ thread:
Here's a bunch of modeled faces.
Although they look like kid faces, they might give an idea on how to build a better nose.
Another googled model for Cloud to see a nice head/jaw/nose structure: