For what it's worth, I didn't notice anything amiss. Maybe like, an extra space in front of a comma once or twice, but nothing that stuck in my memory as odd.
The only thing that still puzzles me about the dialog is at the very beginning when planting the bomb, the voice in Cloud's head tells him it's not just a reactor. Isn't it...? I assume the voice is Zack/Zax remembering the monster lab in Nibelhiem's reactor and mixing them up, like what happens later with the flashback to Tifa and her dad, but that line never seems to pay off. Not that I blame you for that, of course.