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Graphical / Re: [WIP] APZ's New Canon Cloud
« on: 2010-12-16 13:41:15 »
At last! A word from apz himself. Well, goodluck to your final week. Can't wait to see your new cloud.
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simple rewording also makes a lot of space
"use against 1 enemy to cause xyz" becomes "Causes [xyz]" or "Cause [xyz] on one enemy"
Likewise, avoid passive constructions. Start using telegraphics. Strip out anything already implicit.
So,
"This spell is used on one enemy to inflict confusion status"
becomes
"Inflicts Confusion on one enemy"
Even better, read this for a brief overview on making your prose less... flabby.